hmm... contradiction

Here's something I got from my democracy presentation (remember the one which i spent about 4 to 5 nights trying to understand??).


Looks as human rights;
Good bills are protecting human rights;
Welfare organizations:
Good electoral laws ensure accountability; coherence is important


Strong points:
Good voice projection; good eye contact and hand movement; natural and engaging (but see the downside to this below)


The be improved on:
In terms of fluency, try to finish your sentences; If necessary, make your sentences shorter and easier; avoid expressions like ‘you get what I mean’, etc, which help to connect but do not relate to the argument / analysis;
Singlish-isms – whether okay or not depends on the audience; on the one hand, it allows you to connect in a better way with the audience; on the other hand, and depending on the occasion and audience, it may not be the right thing to do;
Look more interested in the Q&A (i.e. look up)

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My aim was to make a boring till can cry blood type topic interesting. but then again, i get this shit from my shit prof about my shit presentation. I SEE NOW. he wants a boring till can cry tears presentation. anyway. i honestly dun like this prof's teaching style. he's a nice person but then a lousy teacher.

anyway, what sort of constructive feedback is this? ok admit. Singlish may be wrong. but then again... er... think the audience is pretty okay what... whatever la. grr... dun like this sort of not here nor there type of commnt. u realised he also notices if you have eye contact or not. so please please when presenting have eye contact with the audience (at least with the prof). bah... lousy tiring fed up irritated waste tme. i am going to go see a doctor today. stupid. before, during and after the presentation i've been having a bad tummy ache, i've not been sleeping well, and i got constant headache..

fed up.